Steampunk Poetry, I was half asleep when I jotted this down, any good?

Question: Steampunk Poetry, I was half asleep when I jotted this down, any good!?

Please be completely honest, I can take bad criticism, it wouldn't be the first time:

"They fly above me,
Loud and mighty!.
They think themselves
High and holy!.
Better than us,
than the rest!.

They face the wind,
The rain, the hail!.
Do as they please
And ready to kill!.
Waving their courage
Above their heads,
Tattered by time,
But still cause dread!.
They are the ships,
High in the sky!.
Their keepers, the pirates,
Keep their own tale!."

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It sound incomplete to me!. I think it needs more clever wording!. It's got plenty of that metaphoric shadowing, it just needs to be used right!. If you left it alone, I'd give it a:

67 out of 100!. If you don't agree, that's fine, it's just an opinion, but what good is literature without opinion!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you definitely have talent, especially if you were half asleep!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it, though the ending seems to be a bit abrupt!. I like the concept and the fluidity!. great show me another!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great, keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's honestly really good!. I like the rhythm!.Www@QuestionHome@Com