Poem: would u take a look?

Question: Poem: would u take a look!?

Well this is the only poem i have really made I was told by a really good friend to post this so i will!.

You had me from hello!.
You had me from the start!.
You had me since we met!.
You had me since we talked!.

Every since we dated,
my life has been the grates,
Now I can't believe we
really didn't make it!.

Now I'm on my own!.
All by myself!.
In the dark!.
In my shell!.

I can't believe it happened!.
I can't beleve it did!.
But if it wasn't for you
I couldn't have done this!.

Be honest what do u thank!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This is a wonderful poem
it clearly talks about since the beginning of time
or ever since!.
The first paragraph says this
The second paragraph about
the time which was started when dating
also wondering if this would still continue
after a long time!.
Now you are by yourself
going soloWww@QuestionHome@Com

I honestly think it's kind of messy!. I can't really sense a meter, and there are quite a couple of spelling errors!. You make out the beginning to make it sound like you're going to rhyme, but I guess this is supposed to be free verse!? I'm sorry, but this doesn't sound free-verse at all!. 2/5Www@QuestionHome@Com

try to tell ur story! obviously somethin big happened and u could go way in depth and add a few more stanzas! its a good topic and stuff tho!. try to make the ending more impactful!. like something that will make the person reading it shiver!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

AHHhhh!.!.!.so sweet, However i only gave you SIXpoints because it seems to be all about humanity, to you!. i liked it, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the syllibals r all wrong has no rythem if u keep them consistant it will be betterWww@QuestionHome@Com

1!.5/5 Needs some work with spelling and in the first stanza you rhymed then you didn't, kinda confusing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow! you defiantly put your feelings into your poetry (that's a really good thing!) many people can't write from their heart and it is really a great poem you should post more :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its was Ok!. Pretty good!. Keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its alright!.!.
it could use some work :/
sorry, i mean its pretty good, just not the bestWww@QuestionHome@Com

i think its actually kinda good
i certainly enjoyed reading your poemWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it but the endin could use sum workWww@QuestionHome@Com