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Question: One of my five minute poems!. what do you think!?
promises made in the heat of passion
I have found can not be kept
words spoken once from your heart
has lost it's feel and depth
you are cold and remote to me
the years have wore you down
I try to rekindle the flames for you
but my efforts, in vain simply drown
I want you to feel for me
the way you used to feel
back when our hearts were ablaze
and our emotions and actions were real
I want us to be in love again
I want to be your one desire
but I can't seem to light your flame
I'm only an ember in your fireWww@QuestionHome@Com
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An amazing 5 minute poem, wow, wanting the excitement back in a relationship, and how time simmers the flame that use to be ablaze! Well written and truly amazing for a 5 minuter!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Your poem certainly tells the story well!. Sounds like the years have broken down walls of love in a marriage, or a relationship!. Beautiful poem!. I feel your pain, even if it is make belief!. In the two lines with 'feel,' probably would be better to change theses and shorten last lines in the same verse!. Suggestion: when our hearts were ablaze,
our emotions and actions real!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
BEAUTIFULWww@QuestionHome@Com
Wow!. This is pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think your poem is great and you are very talented!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Nice =)Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love it!.
can't say much more then that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com