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The Battle


What shall we say then ……From this moment who knows them!?
When boys go out to battle……… Were shall we go then!?
Shall we now call them men!?………When the enemy comes near!?
Young faces filled with fear……… Preparing for battle
As the reality draws near………… Gripped by the sense of fear
Who shall save them!?!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Those we now call men


Rise up as men……… that prove themselves, when we come near
Not to be afraid of them………… That we too, are counted as men
They will smell your fear………… But let them feel the battle
It is war then!?…………………………We shall slay all of them
Let us join the battle……………… For victory then
Who dares to come near!?…………We shall not fear


And not to be intimidated by fear………!.That broken harlot in battle
That draws near…………………………!.!. Sapping the soul
And then……………………………………Brining her fruit to them
Makes fools of men………………………That are near
Yet, there are plenty of them…… Those are not fit, to be called men


Then I shall conquer, by fear…………!.!.And then shall I win the battle
When the battle rage, I shall be near…No room for men that fear
Those men I slay, what of them!?!.!.!.!.!.!.They are buried near!? I shall not
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
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I, Dondi, being of demented mind and questionable body, do hereby and forwith relinquish the head table in the room, as appointed by ElaineP, to the master of the Trigee Sestina!.
Long Live The King!!!


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Wow!. This has to be the most creatively structured poem I've ever seen (not counting legendary, dead poets)!. I have no suggestions of improvement, nor should I!. You have written an amazing poem and I suggest writing more and get even more attractive subjects to write about and publishing!. I agree with "Dondi" wholeheartedly!. Long live the King!.

100 out of 100!. This is all just opinion, and if you don't agree, that's fine, but what good is literature without opinion!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I was going to attempt one!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.but, this is the work of sheer genius, and my poor effort could never compete!. It's hard enough writing a sestina (I know, my abandoned effort is in the bin, as we speak) but to couple that with the Tigree-thingy!.!.!.!.well!
Hats off to you!. Both verses work well in themselves but, when put together this poem leaves me speechless!.
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Ach, mein Gott!!! This is formidable! How I love form, when it is witty and flexible like this!. I am not too sure that all these adjectives apply, but never mind!. It is the thought that counts!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I, Elaine P, do henceforth take fourth place in line behind, TD, Gideon and Dondi!. I am in awe of all you guys!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Man, your good!!.!. With words
your art so loud!.!.!. painting pictures
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Well!.!.!.this is simply fantastic!. You made short work of this job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com