I wrote this poem..Tell me wat you think?

Question: I wrote this poem!.!.Tell me wat you think!?

I've looked for so long for you
searching and screaming out
to you

why cant you hear my cries for you
please tell me the truth!.!. do you even think i deserve you!.

Ive been wanting and longing for you
is it that i dont deserve you

I want you to hear my cries for you
please tell me what i need to do

all my life you've been denyin me of you
There is nothing in this world i wouldnt do for you

So HAPPINESS please tell me where i can find you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Your poem has possibilities!.

Searching for happiness is a great theme!. Maybe you should go further and discover that happiness is always in your own heart!.

Keep writing!.!.!.you will improve with every poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

its alright but u use u to many timesWww@QuestionHome@Com

most of the lines end with: you!.you you!.!.!.
might want to change that!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com