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Question: My poem, A leap of love, comments!?
She made a promise to her mother
To learn to dance just like no other
But she could feel it in her vision
To never make one bad decision

Her mom had done a move so daring
And found the floor was not so sparing
And now she’s slightly paralyzed
Her dream is done unrealized

As years went by a new contest
Her daughter vowed to be the best
She felt her mother watching her
Praying old events will not recur

Then she glided to that very move
She did the leap and found her groove
Then like Fred Astaire did with a broom
She danced the floor and swept that room

Then in her ears there came a roar
The votes were in a perfect score
And to all the others who had tried
With that leap of love they were denied

But a vision seen then was not kept
Her mom forgave her as they wept
They felt their tears, they shared their cries
Her mom had won now through her eyesWww@QuestionHome@Com


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wow its amazin it tells a story wit truth good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's great, the verses are too short though, and it messes with the rhythm!. It is great though, the story, the title, the rhyming!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love the poem , really heart felled and amazing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com