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Question: What do you think of this poem!? What does it make you feel!? Any comments!?
SLOWLY BREAKING

My heart is beating faster than the light
My mind is blowing away like the wind
Confusion between my thoughts
As fear and anxiety seem to have fought in vain
I do not know if I can take you from my sight
But when that day comes my eyes will become blind
Because I can not bear to see these memories fly away or rot
So much have I put into these painful but sweet moments
Only to know that one day I just might need to lose them
My heart risks being broken for a few months of painful joy
Only if miracles really do exist
Then I would never like this resist
But as this is life I guess I will move, ride the wave as it rollsWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
You need to remember punctuation to add drama, not just make it constant enjambement!. also avoid cliché in description and similies!. It seems like a very personal poem to you and overall I think you have done a good job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

the ups & downs of lifeWww@QuestionHome@Com