10 pts...I wrote this poem stoned...lol, is it good?

Question: 10 pts!.!.!.I wrote this poem stoned!.!.!.lol, is it good!?

Sunday Morning

Gently, floating sensations
become calm and grounded!.
Thoughts adhere to foundations,
Her lying contently in my bed!.

Splended morning sun rays
Radiate on her smiling!.
Tranquil, she does not wake
silently still sleeping!.

I don't want to get up
Numbed that at any moment
Maybe this instance may stop
Maybe this instance wouldn't!.

Lying with her, I grin,
Here falling back asleep
Again to where I had been,
This moment will I'll repeat!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Good by whose standards!?

You have some evocative words in there, but your structure is weak, and you sound, frankly!.!.!. umm!.!.!. stoned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like love has a lot of kick to it as does this poem!. Well penned!. Some word choices to consider: third stanza last line, try won't instead of wouldn't!. S4L4 delete "will I'll" and replace with "I'll" or "will I"!. Overall, my compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

splendidWww@QuestionHome@Com

not bad for a stoner lol youre probably amazing when you are fully thereWww@QuestionHome@Com

its alrightWww@QuestionHome@Com

its goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

hi chigga this is really good one !.!.keep writting!.!.!.nice poem
good luck!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com