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Your bloodied soul, I cling to forever!. Drink deep the sight of me without fear!. Your dark thirsty eyes consume me alive, Handsome, a wordsmith, yet barely alive!. Feed me and hold me, Where now and which way!? Please God just show me, Where am I stained!?Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Hey DP, I think you are going way too far back in the past to bring this one out, like childhood!. There is no stain, just scars, but drag it out and stomp it!. They are all healed, you are ok!. Thanks for sharing!. Hey Silent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Again, I liked it a lot!. :) However, unless it was intentional, you finished two lines with 'alive' rather close to one another!. The repetition could have been on purpose, but I'm not you, so I don't know!. You said "consume me alive," and then "yet barely alive!." That's the only part that I didn't really like, but to each their own!. ;) Thank you for this! <3Www@QuestionHome@Com i loved it, it was so natural and it was very beautifully written great job and keep working at it and i loved how it rhymed but just remember it does not always have to rhyme to be a poem just keep that in mindWww@QuestionHome@Com Another BEST! I feel it deeply!. A deep Godly poem!. Thanks for sharing!. Each to their own interpretation, so I won't ravel it out!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I might "feel" it if I felt like going to listen to "goth poetry slam jam", otherwise, no!. Try thinking of less trite overwrought imagery!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Good!Www@QuestionHome@Com Why wordsmith and why God!? With poetry, every word matters, so I shouldn't have to wonder why you picked it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Wow!. awesome!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com well said and written!.!.i like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com yes i doWww@QuestionHome@Com wow your rhymes seem so natural, they just flow so well together!.!.!.!. lovely jobWww@QuestionHome@Com |