Please let me know what you guys think about my poem?

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Question:

We lay close
just never to close!.
How close, is close enough!?
Laughing deeply
laughing hard
we carry lust
maybe more!?
were just friends
with something more
warning
pre-label
don’t ever get attached
don’t ever throw your emotions in
don’t close your eyes
for longer then a second
its going to blind you
for that person who's just a friend
for that person you ******
for that person who's only meant to be a screw
is going to catch your head
is going to make you trip
his going to make you fall
its a price
the price you pay
friends with something more
its got you with full command!.
now you like him
and now you need more
but baby, you didn’t read the warning
his never going to fall for you
your just a ****
friends with benefits
a little something more
its got you with full command!.

thank you for the good & bad comments, i love any response on my writing on what i need to improve, change, or if you just like it! thank you! =DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I like it! It sounds like it's been written by someone who has been burned and that's always more passionate than if it's an imagined scenario!. Only comment is that there was an error twice: the proper abbreviation for "he is" is "he's" and you had "his"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

All I can say is that your poem is very good but it doesn't depend on the words, it depends on how youw ill say it and how you put feeling while reciting it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!! I put you in my contacts, so this question is on my profile page as well as others!. You gave a great answer, on my, "What are your thoughts on teenage pregnancy!?" question so I just decided to!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the beginning sounds like from taking back sunday's makedamnsure song!. but i liked it :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it and wouldn't change a thing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com