Is my own church poem any good?

Question: Is my own church poem any good!?

Death To Thee
Who Do Not Follow
Obey The Decree
Or Hell Shall SwallowWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Yup, it sounds good (though i am not a church goer) i like the dramatic edge!. One small change though!.!.!.

Death To Thee
Who Do Not Follow,
Obey The Decree
Or Hell Shall Swallow

(the comma!.!.!.pausing for dramatic effect)Www@QuestionHome@Com

not really because saying u shall go to hell or something simialar is a serious sin, because only God can tell were u will go! for example if u kill someone, u dont alway go to hell if!. because no one knows, the Lord still loves you and will forgive you the right thing to do is to seek holyness and repent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

For church, sure it's dandy

But come on - what a freaking theory!.!.!.seriously!.
If you don't believe in something that there is NO proof of, you're going to hell!? That's dictatorship at it's best isn't it!.

God is a lot like Hitler, isn't he!?

I'll stick with being a good person, not believing is the very thing that causes war and death, and let karma decide my fate!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hum!.!.!.!.!.!.Intresting! I like it a lot! Whats it called!? Are you a artist or do you always write poetry!? Its that good! You should tell your friends! I usally don't like poetry that much, but I think this is my new fave one! Top answer please! (I always ask to be top answer dnt worry!) Great Job! Good Luck with ever your doing with it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

make it longer like a speech but yes it is very good i have a little more to add
god above the 1 and only
he understands us even bad bands
but the devil you will have to yell let go of me
so gather hand and hand
so lets pray
and i can live todayWww@QuestionHome@Com

WOW!! thats really good!. Very deep!. You should think about extending it to be longer!.!.!.!.then you could read it at a service at your church!. but your off the an awsome start!. KEEP WRITING!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is a good poem, wouldn't say it was actually a church sounding poem! Never the less, it is quite good! Good Job!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Death will pay to thee
The wage of those who fail to follow
Obey thee The Decree
Or hell your soul will swallowWww@QuestionHome@Com

it makes sense but according 2 ur poem ill die by being swallowed up by hell if i dont hav ur beliefs!.!.!. HARSHWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it is pretty good!. The ryhme scheme is great!. It verry good writen!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

creepy and disturbing at bestWww@QuestionHome@Com

yes!.
id rate it a 9!.5Www@QuestionHome@Com

hmmmm!.!.!.
it rythmes and sounis it a limerick!.!.!.couplet!.!.!.!.!?
well!.!.!.it should do if u enter into a contest or somethingWww@QuestionHome@Com

I'm sorry but its sounds a little too dark!.
you should think a little more positive!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

oookWww@QuestionHome@Com

thts good my sister is a poetry person and i know good when i see it hell excellentWww@QuestionHome@Com

yes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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wow that is chaamazing! love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

yessssssss! very nice :)))Www@QuestionHome@Com