READ MY POEM tell me if u like it the 10 answer will get the 5 points?

Question: READ MY POEM tell me if u like it the 10 answer will get the 5 points!?

Help i wrote a love poem!?
Do you understand i thought you was the moon
when you walked in my life i thought the storm would be over soon
you made the stars seem more brighter then before
you hair is gold your smile is the sea's shore
i'll never regret meeting you becuase u made me smile
so let us talk and love for awhile
and if you feel as if im going to fast
i'll slow it down and make it last
because your the pen i just write
your the princess im your black knight
your the ocean i just float
and if i drown your my life boat
you really made me happy inside
just promise me you'll be by my sideWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It's pretty good!. Did you write it for a girl!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

You should change the part ''because your the pen i just write'' to ''because you are the pen with which I write'' and ''was' to ''were'' in the first verse!.

It's really sweet though,has a nice message too!. The girl you give it too will be really happy I can see :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Seriously, i loved that poem, its so nice!. I LOVED IT! bt there were just a couple of spelling errors!. I hate saying things like that!.!.!.!.sorry! Im now in a really good mood now beacuse of that amazing poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think the poem is good!. The only part I would change is the pen part that really don't make too much sense!. But it is a good love poem to write someone good jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

Im not really a touchy feely type of guy but i found it to be pretty good!.!.!.!.maybe you could try to use bigger more complex words to rhyme with eachother, just to make things a little more interesting!.!.!.!.still pretty good thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com

REALLY bad grammar throughout the whole thing!. Some of the metaphors made absolutely no sense!. You never used the right form of you're!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i think it's really sweet!. i would take the time to polish it up a bit and get it published or copyrighted!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

amzing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, its beautiful! I love the way it rhymes! You just had a couple of spelling errors but other than that it was amazing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow i like it!. its realy good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

awww wish someone would write that for me =')Www@QuestionHome@Com

its good, got a nice flow to it, simple aa bb cc!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

so lovely!put in a girls locker and she'll die for u!Www@QuestionHome@Com