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Question: Could you please give me some feedback!.!.!?!?
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I can't live another day without your face reminding me I'm okay
And that I'm not alone tonight
So hold on tight and never let go
When you want to give up just keep on going
Then you'll never, ever have to know what it's like on the other side
Then you'll never have to feel what it's like inside

And your beautiful, magical, mysterious smile
Makes me want to stay awhile
But I know if I do then I'll fall more than I already have
And the look in your eye tells me I won't even realize
'Til you're gone
Leaving me to write this lonely song

And my dream was to fly through the stars in the sky
But a meteor, meteor came crashing down on me
Now I'm left to wonder why
I never took a chance and tried
Instead I just layed down and died
Yeah, instead I just curled up and criedWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, it has great emotion buried in it!. I noticed, though, that you don't really have a rhyming structure!. You just rhyme wherever you can think of a rhyme!. Don't take that badly!. Some lines also needed to be split, because you had a rhyme within one line!. I can't wait to see more from you, and I hope you work to improve this poem because it could be great!. I also can't wait for the title!.

Hope I helped!Www@QuestionHome@Com