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Question: Please comment my poem!?
Crash Land
Fastening the straps on my bladed feet
then tightening for ankle support,
an awkward stumble at first i thought
but beginners excitement to ice the sheet!.
One foot, a second, collapsing i dread
silver blades slipping either way,
tightly gripped to the edge i'll stay
but you held me hand instead!.
My hand comfortable in your little hand
trusting your guidance that every step,
my frantic walks, trip overs I'll never forget
tiny fingers leave my grip for me to crash land!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
There once was an English Guy
Who wrote poetry as an aside
His rhymes were well thought
For someone self taught
He should tell to others with pride!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Please tell me you're not really English!. If English is not your first language then I applaud your efforts!. If English is your first language then I suggest you go back to the basics of English grammar before you attempt any more poetry!.
e!.g Please comment my poem!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Hey dude you have a bright future in this field !. Your poem is simply "SUPERB" ,"EXTRAORDINARY"
Dont Think that i am telling this for your best answer !. You are GREAT!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
genious!. Simply genius!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its good but!.!.!.
if you are trying to be an aspiring poet you need to concentrate more on grammar!.!.!.
i!.e!. "but you held me hand instead"!. Should be "but you held my hand instead"Www@QuestionHome@Com
on a scale of 1-10, i would give you 8!.!.!.
very well written!.!.!.
although it cant be read in a tune sort of way!.!.
very niceWww@QuestionHome@Com
Is good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very good! Maybe a bit of rhyme, but otherwise v!.good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i love you beacuse you have write a marvaloius poen darling my email is ahsan_x2_ss@yahoo!.com
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