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Question: Do you like my poem/song!? I call it "Tears"!?
Tears fall down from heaven onto my feet,
Whats going on up there!? Why is God always asleep,
The cold tears I felt brought me back to the past,
Remembering how our relationship ended so fast!.
Now here I stand,
Helpless and left for death,
I am trembling,
As I hang by a thin string!.
I just close my eyes,
And so many days pass by,
I would die for anyone,
Oh! what have I become!.
As I crawl under my bed,
And start to cut my own neck,
I feel no pain,
As all my efforts were in vain!.
By:
ANTI CHRIST
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i like it!.!.
i say a 9
its deep, dark and empty!.!.like my heart
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As for it being a poem, it is good!. However, for me, the subject matter doesn't "do it" for me!. I believe in God and not suicide!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really liked it too!.!.!.but in the first stanza, you say "tears" in the first and third lines, so it sounded a bit redundant!. It was still wonderful though!. ^^Www@QuestionHome@Com
wow that was nice!!! but do you really cut your own neck or is it the poem!.!.!.!.
and please answer the im in desprit help question!.!.!.!.(my question)Www@QuestionHome@Com
it's really good, just, it would have been nice if it wasn't about someone killing themselves lol :)Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's a great poem, quite depressing but those are the best ones!
7/10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
eeeeeeeeeeeeee, bueno!.!.!.!., eeeee ke opine otro!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it! 8!.5 out of 10!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
that was really good! 11/10!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
10/10 i thought it was lovely!.!.!.!.!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com