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Question: Getting into Songwriting/Poetry!. Need some feedback!!?
I wrote this pretty quickly yesterday!. I'd like some feedback on the direction it's heading!. also, please check out my other (Which I think is better, and finished): http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.

Wake up!.!.
This is too much!.!.
My life continues, but!.!.
It's just never enough!.!.

Stranger, to myself now
My reflection, not what it used to be
I don't even know how
Looking at myself, what can't I see!?

Everything falls out of place
As I feel the ground shake
Do you believe this is real or fake!?
Standing still, I feel the wake!.!.

Do you hear the grinding!?
I'm falling down, down, up
My thoughts are unwinding
Life going backwards, it's toughWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
its pretty good i like the rhyming couplet in verse 2 aswell (Y)

as a musician myself i fell like you need some sort of chorus

like verse 2 for the chorus then play verse 4 then back to verse 3 for the other chorus

its all depends on wat kinda music you got to it but the lyrics are brilliant!. thumbs up (Y)Www@QuestionHome@Com

kool I realy like it if your writing a song its good that it rhymes so frequently because that makes it easy for others to singWww@QuestionHome@Com