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You tell me
I used to be better
And you expect me
To stay the same forever

You argue
Againts yourself
And who knew
All the pain that you've felt

I don't know what I have caused
I think it's time to rewind
And how much could I have lost!?
Am I losing what used to define--me!?

And you say I
Don't care anymore
So I wonder why
Why it's always been ignored

So why me!?
Is it like this for everyone!?
I can't see
How any of this used to be fun

You tell me!.!. Tell me!.!.

Will any of this ever get better!?
I don't see how any of this happend
I think I've realized how to start this letter
The one that'll make you think that this is the end

Looking through the window!.!.
With both my time stained eyes!.!.
And I wonder if you know
If it's even worth a try-

-Now I understand your reasons
But I still don't care
I think the me you know is done
You can't change me, no, don't you dareWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
you are good!.!.!.!.wish you luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

this is pretty good!.
being a poet myself,
all i have to say is work a little bit on the rhythm!.
other than that,
excellent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

To me it sounds more like song lyrics, but it's kinda angsty!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

cooool!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com