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Question: What do you guys think of my new poem!?!!?
I wrote this for a few friends I have lost!. Some parts don't flow correctly, but necessarily!. It needed certain details!. =]


I feel so alone,
In my head you knock,
But no one is home!.

We make and break,
The same empty promise,
No matter what the problem,
Or what the circumstance,

One day you'll forget,
One day I will too,
That the other existed,
But i swear thats not what I told you!.

Every night when I go to sleep,
Feels like my life rewinds,
Relive the same day,
And I can't stop time!.

But I know its not the same,
Because one day I went to your home,
Only to find that yesterday,
You had gone off alone!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Excelent so much emotion put into one poem!. And dont llisten to that al guyWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it! even though it doesn't really flow it does show some emotion which I like :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Pretty good!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nope aint got a clue what you are on about, ever tried writing sober!?Www@QuestionHome@Com