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Question: I just wrote this poem, what do you all think!? Any criticism welcome!. Written in free form, no real structure!.
And when the sky melts
I'll meet you by the city
and we'll come crashing down
like lightning and thunder
cats of the true royal sense
that tear down the day
and wrench open the night
worked up with benny and other
capsule-like delights
Ah work work work
drive drive drive
die die die
and thrive!
Liquid tidbits
and lizards that twist and wind
all along the sea bottom desert floor
scorching rays scratchy side
and blistering winds
all make you wish you could just
run and hide
but run to where
my friend
where will society's trap
hold you in the end!?
The lights all stand
on the edge of the hill
sparking about like bugs on a windowsill
too bad they are all just
people in pain
look little boy
your mothers alone
wondering where her boy went
with her skirt!.
Now run
run run run
run along with me
and we'll find our refuge
by the sea
and the blinding lights
inside that city!.
When all is said and done
where will we be!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love it! i think its a great poem!.!.!. keep on writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com