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Question: Poetry!? Please help!!?
1!.What do you think of this poem!?
2!.What does it tell you!?
3!.What can be improved!?
4!.What should the title be!?
5!.Any suggestions!?
Thanks!
Motel room smells
Of many tall tales
Of cheap perfume and lust-unforgiving
Colliding into sounds of
exhasted hesistation
In room 17
For fluorescent adolescents in the air tonight
Charmatic glances to the alarm clock
Flashes about 12 o'clock
It's midnight's late reminder of
Teenage lust or is it love!?
In room 17
For a pessimist, she pretty optimistic
One might say simplistic
For fluorescent adolescents in the air tonight
He feels the need to let go
Of teenage angst set a glow
In room 17Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like it!.
Title: Room 17
It Tells Me: The story of a hotel room and what it's been through in time!.
What'd u think about mine!? (email me killswitch013@hotmail!.com)
1: Early Morning
Every morning I'd lay about the empty beach,
Waiting for the sun to rise!.
One day I met a girl who taught me how to love!.
Every morning we'd lay about the empty beach,
Waiting for the sun to rise!.
The girl had enough of me, and left asfar away!.
Even though my heart was broken, I moved on today!.
Now, Every morning I'd lay about the empty beach!.!.
Alone, Waiting for the sun to rise!.
2: A Glass of Water
Every morning before I go - I'd have a glass of water!.
Every day when I come back - I'd have a glass of water!.
Every night before I sleep - I'd have a glass of water!.
Now here I lay, in my grave - Reminded of those memories!.!.
When I could wake up, move and even fall asleep!.!. Knowing That there's always tomorrow!.Www@QuestionHome@Com