poem? I call it "Whatever"?

Question: Do you like my song/poem!? I call it "Whatever"!?

Kick me,hit me,slap me,scold me but there is no submission,
Trample me while I am dead; throw me into another dimension,
Degrade me,deprive me,criticize me but there is no suppression,
I cut myself,I cry helplessly; now I am going into a heavy depression,

I want to go to hell,
In love with the dark side I fell,
I sit beside Satan; crying on his lap,
He feels sorry for me and gives me some crack!.

I never pick your placing,
I cant afford the pain,
Just when I think my problems are resolved,
It seems every time I get close to you; you dissolve,

For long I have been crying,
For long my soul is dieing,
Please; somebody listen to my voice,
Being all alone was never my choice!.

By:
ANTI CHRIST

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its very emo but in a dark way i kinda like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

A LOSER's lost integrity is apparent in the lines!.!.!.!. You sound suicidal!.!.!. You need a lover!.!.!. ?t seems you are thwarted in love!.!.!.!. I really feel pity for the speaker in the poem!.!.!. I hope it isnt you!.!.!. As for the grade: 1/10!.!.!.!.

You need a series of objective correlatives to express your feelings and thoughts otherwise no one would even understand your poems, let alone appreciating or even valuing them!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

No, It's not my favorite!. You have been created with a good mind, therefore I would suggest you choose more pleasing thoughts to write about!. These unpleasant thoughts are defeating!. It is difficult to rise above the thoughts we entertain!. Okay, I am listening to you!. Your choices you make are your own!. You can change your thinking perhaps by changing the way you choose your name!. EDIT Take (Hickorysticks) advise!. He put it on the line for you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

On a scale on 1-10 I would say 7 because it is a great poem but it is a little harsh and seems a little bit on the dark side!. But if that is really how you or someone else feels I would say it is a good way to express your feelings and emotions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes but it just depends if that is the kind of poems your into but i dont like the dark and mean type but that is not judging you by the poem for all i know your a really nice cheerful person well i will stop talking but yes i like the poem!. very lovely!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I have to accept that the scholar above me has made a very nice critique of this poem!. You can trust him as you trust me!. I told you that I also teach poetry!. Didnt I!?

This time I will give you 20/100Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sorry not my style!. Sounds like the person is reaching out and in pain!. So sad!. The person needs to find joy and peace!. Not pain and doom!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

as a fellow poet

i like all poetry

any expression is cool by me

rate it outa what tho!?

10 /100 /5!?

in general i like it
hows that!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

This a story of frustration!.Please add melodramatic and sentimental wordsWww@QuestionHome@Com

I really think you should submit them to a publisher, they are sad but also lovely!.!.!.!.xWww@QuestionHome@Com

Some bits are funny! ha! 5/5 thoWww@QuestionHome@Com

No! 0 being the worst i imagine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that was really good!!! you need to put all your poems into a book! lol you are sooooo talentedWww@QuestionHome@Com

i have never see n a normal person really write a poem and heres my proof!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it's good but i'm not into the whole dark evil thing, it makes me really sad to hear someone talk like that :( u need jesusWww@QuestionHome@Com

Revelation 20:15
"If anyone's name was not found written in the Book of Life he was thrown into the lake of fire!."

you're not the antichrist, you're just a lost soul without much hope!.!.!.
here's your hope!.!.

Revelation 3:20
"Here I am, I stand at the door and knock!. If anyone hears my voice and opens the door, I will come in and eat with him and he with Me!."

That's Jesus standing at the door of your heart knocking!. He's a gentleman, so he's not going to barge in though!. It's a free gift for you that He's trying to give, better to take it because He gives true freedom- none of these lies of Satan's!.

You say it wasn't "your choice" and you "don't want to be alone", but it is your choice!. And you're the only one responsible for that!. You can change that though, read above!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

honestly, its good that you write down your frustrations!.!.!.!.but do u really think that that's ti!? You are just going to isolate yourself from the world and cry yourself to sleep!? DO u seriously think you've done evrything possible to actually enjoy life!? all your troubles and emotional baggage, yeah it hurts man but there are answers!. You want someone to listen to your voice, talk to God, talk to him liek you would talk to a normal person, Instead of putting up a wall and calling him stupid!. He wants to hear your complaints!. He wants you to search his word for advice!. maybe you could study a bit of Jesus' problems, being perfect, he was ridiculed, beaten, spit on, murdered, humiliated!. all for you and the life u hate so much!.Www@QuestionHome@Com