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Question: Experimenting on a new style!.!.!.what do you think!?
My dearest silver clouds
In changing forms,you speak
against the blue,words
of love letters

Wet raindrops,your
feather touches run down
my temple slopes
and I, a green leaf
of white water Lillies
sway!.!.!.with your
light little strums--
--gently rocking me
to the slow glide
of a dance--

You dont know your kisses
when you lap against my lips;
you will never know
that I live,breathing them!.

But never will I tell you
the call of distant rivers,
-whose froths of glitter
throw silhouttes to horizons-
to dream valleys woven
in bright sunny lights
And never will I heed
a voice ,apart from
the rhythm of those faint
finger tip taps against the lakeWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I couldn't seem to define it but, it is definite!. Natural!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it flows really well, very delicate and poetic! i like it!

one thing i would say though is i'm not sure about the lack of gaps between commas and the random dashes in the poem!.

other than that the wording is beautiful!Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW, it's AWESOME!. ur a good poet, keep it up!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com