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Question: Last poem of the night!. Rewrittten, but is it better!.!?
"profane"


Agony hangs so heavy,
on the wings of fallen angels!.
Witness these my final days,
I commit myself to rage!.

Kingdoms rise, and empires fall,
forgotten like yesterdays dreams!.
I don't believe all that I've seen,
but believed every word I heard!.

I am not the man I was,
I know I'll die alone!.
With a bow and a profane kiss,
I speak of honor and trust!.

I brought this all upon myself,
regret will someday end!.
Honesty is pain, anger is devine,
I'll not join the walking dead!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The first two lines of each verse totally filled with awe!. Second verse, 3 & 4 lines are so unrealistic, yet such broad thinking! This transposed thought is closer to faith than what you might realize!. Choice words throughout!. Edit: Haven't read the first one!. Sorry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was AMAZING! Nice job!. If you have other poems give me the links I'd love to read them! I didn't read your original version!.
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<3 I love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com