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Question: For the 1,000th time (again) do you like my new poem!?
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The thunderous herd of butterflies
rolls down from the hyacinth!. We tremble not
as the air shakes none!.
The terrible tormented snails charge
as Kipling’s Light Brigade
is told in the gazebo by Aunt Charlotte!.
Lemonade quaffs a parched niece and nephew
as the caterpillars spin a silken hammock
for their afternoon nap!.
Gilgamesh and Josaphat
are new names for two old cats
that sleep in the shade nearby!.
Fairies that look just like dandelion seeds
float in the afternoon air as the tales
of foreign travails flow down from Olympus…
And Auntie’s flask gives her a splash
as she reads to us of sprites and spirits on ice!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Lovely picture of a hot summer day!
(Can I be Auntie!? It's been a long day!)
Don't think I've ever seen a herd of butterflies!.!.!.but they are coming back!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Charming! paints a lovely picture, thunderous butterflies,
torremented snails, caterpillers,fairies ------------use to be fun to blow on those fluffy seed balls, from the first word to the last
charming! Bravo!.
Have you really counted 1000!Www@QuestionHome@Com
My favourite I think you had me at herd of butterflies, only one complaint the wasp has taken to my lemonade, so annoying!. I am racing with the snails now I am on a lemonade high!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Cheers to Auntie - she is able to inspire fantasy in her audience! This fantasy is not only contained as a "mind image" - but, spills over into "reality" to create a real world of fantasy!. Long may it reign!Www@QuestionHome@Com
hyacinth,Kipling’s, Gilgamesh and Josaphat, Olympus…
Why not throw in Gucci Armani and Versace!?
To many semi important schnickschnack!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I don't think it is one of your best, but it is a cool poem and a branch into a different area!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
What!?!?Butterflies don't make noise like cattle!. Take each part and make a poem from each!. Too many things into one poem!. Ideas are great but are too mixed!. Please continue with one thought into one poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Mythology, lemonade and memories of childhood!. Sounds like an afternoon to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Just beautiful!. Thunderous herds of papillons and charging escargo indeed!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is wonderful TD!. Clap!. Clap!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
What s not to like I think you covered about everything!. Very good, thank you for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I wouldn't mind having those snails with garlic butter!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yeppers, I do!.
Up to the standards for TD Poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think that Auntie has the right spirit!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
No, but if you do fair enough!. It's a perfectly reasonable effort for the style!. Keep at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its k but not wat u can call a great pc!. of lit!. =p good luck editing if urplanning toWww@QuestionHome@Com