Do you lke my poem?

Question: Do you lke my poem!?

I should’ve known today would be a good day!.
I should’ve known when I saw the rain,
That today would be a good day to die,
The clouds tried to warn me,
And the rain told me, but I didn’t listen,
Because I had thought that
Today would be a good day to live!.
Today was the day I died but,
It didn’t hurt like I thought it would,
It didn’t hurt at all, because I could just
Fly away, and nothing would hold me back!.
And now the sun is shining, and
I sill remember, the day I died!.
I remember the rain, and I hold it closer
Then I ever held you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

A nice piece of prose(far away from poetry)but it tells about a very intimate relationship that failed and left the lady a wreckage!.But suddenly she realizes that failing in love is not the end of every thing and as long as the beautiful rain falls,one should continue living and enjoying this universe!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a good start, but it sounds like you're really young!. This is how most great poets start out!. I suggest you begin to read other famous poems and try to understand them!. Not all poems have to have rain or death in them which is a common misconceptions, and if you do want to have death as the theme, don't tell us, show us!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I LOVE IT!!! The ending wasn't that great i loved it and loved it and saw "I sill remember, the day I died!." and was looking foward to an awesome ending and i was disapointed other wise it was greatWww@QuestionHome@Com

Your theme is good- you stick with your topic thoroughly!. But the meter seems to be a little bit off!. Pretend you're saying it, and that should help with the comma abuse!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

kinda seems like you were given a poem about rain to write for english homework

and you just made the assignment really emo!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i dont get it
it was a good day to die
and good day to live
but then you died
and the sun was shining!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I kind of like it!. I'm not that in to poetry in general though, so don't be insulted that I don't love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Jade, all I really want to say on the subject is that you probably ought not to post your own poetry for just anybody at all to read!. Please be careful!.

~MadeleineWww@QuestionHome@Com

Yeah I agree with Giovanna :P
if you used a better choice of words it would sound awesome!
and if you don't mind you COULD make it rhyme!.
good luck! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

Emo lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

Nice, Ms!.Emo!. Use a thesaurus, make it sound greatWww@QuestionHome@Com

Good for its sad idea, but im not a fan of that kind of poetry XDWww@QuestionHome@Com

That's nice!. Keep it upWww@QuestionHome@Com

i think thats really good!. is obivious that you had something on your mind!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i would re word it a little bit good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow thats powerful, and sad!.!.!. but its really good
i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

noWww@QuestionHome@Com