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Question: This poem is rather important!.!.!. Help!?
I am writing a poem for a woman who has just recently lost her second husband!. Is this poem good to give someone at a funeral!? Is it weird that it is in first person!? My friends say it is!. Will it just depress her!? HELP!

I`ll journey to a place I`ve never been
A place I`ve dreamed of time and time again!.
The wind will coax me forth and push me on
When tome has come to be where I belong!.
I`ll walk alone to where it is I go
What lies before my feet I do not know!.
I`ll sleep beneath the empty skies
With memories for lullabies
And watch the moon arise in yonder dale!.
Words were left unspoken
Hearts remained unbroken!.
Stories lost or drowned by sorrow
To hear the bell ring in the morrow!.
I set a path veiled black by grief
Yet dance upon a pure relief!.
I hold no question cold and blind
But onward strive till ends of time
I voyage long that I have yet to sail!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I love it!. I think it has great imagery!. I don't think it will depress her!. I think she will appreciate the fact that you gave something of yourself in such a lovely, personal way!. Never fear a positive gift from the heart!. You can't go wrong!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

That is really good!. Nice use of words!.
good luck and keep writing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If she cries at it she'll cry because it's pretty!. I love it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's perfectWww@QuestionHome@Com