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Question: Umpteenth edit--HONEST rating please!?
As the froth of nectar
that waters the pond of dreams;
you sputter
In your embrace
I bloom
as Lilly blossoms!.

As snow's soft flakes,
you melt on my petal cheeks
touching me
not quite!.

Memories' butterfly kisses
turn into love letters
before my interlaced lashes --
--written amongst
changing cloud patterns
in our long forgotten
secret scripts

And i wishfully think
Is the rhythm
in honey dew drips
upon window sill;
simply the tunes
of my love for you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Very good!.

However, I'd change "lashes" to "fingers!." "Lashes" can bring to mind getting beaten with a whip, which does not flow well with the rest of the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com