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Question: Could Helsing have been commissioned by the Counts Son to slay him!?
Sight From Past
Into the NightShade Lanett road on
her ScarletRed Stallion carrying her well
She unlike her Kin could watch the dawn
but Helsing hunted with the furry of Hell
While riding her steed she began to drift
into a DeeperSleep than she had known
A veil of BlindSight began to lift
Harker’s LegacyPast to her was shown
The council high
A familiar youth
by the name of Harker
none knew FullTruth
At the head of they
sits HelsingTall
Seen in his eyes
wishing Vlad would fall
A pact is made
from the man they knew
but his lineage
from the Count be true
A son of the Devil
wishing Father dead
gives an Oath to hunters
if CountsBlood be shed
His FirstBorn
to Helsing shall give
if the Count
no longer lives
And Lanett wakes with tears anew
Hoping to the NightGoddess this is not trueWww@QuestionHome@Com
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Oh wow!. This is excellent!. Vlad Harker pays Van Helsing to kill Dracula in exchange for the life of Vlad's firstborn child!. Wow!. Wow!. dude!. Okay, I'm in awe, nice pathos, keep going, more and more and more and more!. When this is through, I want to see it elegantly scripted on parchment paper!. That would make me!.!.!.so happy!. By the way, you mean "fury" with one "r", not "furry!." I seriously doubt that Hell is soft and fluffy, but that's not up to me, now is it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I, like some, have followed from when they first arose! This is a well placed chapter and continues the story well enough!.!.!. more then that, as far as the tale goes this is one of the most telling and exiting! However, for a poem it is a bit off and I say a bit because I couldn't get into the rhythm!. It is not horrible in the least!.!.!. it, as all the others, shows your true talent in words!. I am glad to see the series still goes on today after what happened last night!.!.!. keep them coming!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Powerful still indeed although this time
"At the head of (they)
sits HelsingTall" (them!?)
LOL
and the ending
"And Lanett wakes with tears anew
Hoping to the NightGoddess this is not true" needs broke to fit the form!.!.!.
And Lanett wakes
with tears anew
Hoping to the NightGoddess
this is not true!.!.!.
Something to that effect *^_^*
Other then that, your word usage is growing immensely yet still remains so dark and deep! I am truly into this my friend *^_^* having become a quick fan<3Www@QuestionHome@Com
How completely unexpected and intriguing are the revelations in Lanett's vision!. This is a powerful and exciting part of the story, written with your customary immense talent!. It will be a wonderful book, but it is working beautifully as a series of poems!. I have been enthralled from the beginning and wish that it could go on forever as I will be almost sad to see it end!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Who is your hero!!? I have tried to figure this out because, in the very beginning you set up the son, then when you introduce the woman he falls in love with he becomes a very well-suited villain as her master and oppressor, THEN when she dies he becomes a very good father and returns to my mind as a hero character, BUT NOW he is dead (so we assume) and this Lanette is our heroine!.!.!. that took a lot of breath out of me!. This is taking so many turns I am not sure I want to continue reading!.!.!.!.!.
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Oh who am I kidding, this is one of the most exiting tales of adventure, romance and Vamperisum that I have seen in a while, I will be here till the end and beyond!Www@QuestionHome@Com