My new poem "Could a night if moonless be so lost?"?

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Could a night if moonless be so lost!?

Should a night sky be so full!?
If a star should shoot away would such event be a bother!?
Not much a glimmer of hope, a star short, a night so dull!.
As if we would notice them gone!.

A place for a full moons presence to be a treasure
the whole world over,
wish such a place was not light-years away!.
For a night sky's magic to be mystery as it is pleasure!.
Could a world if moonless be so lost for our eyers to forget!?

Tall tales if spoke with much life and joy bring questions so vivid and bright,
but should such an imagination go to waste on such distant a miracle!.
For new hopes of wishing upon that shooting star one night!.
Twinkle twinkle little star alone in a night if only we would wish to look!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Not to rewrite it, rearrange 3 lines, and replace 3 words for rhyme:A place for a full moons presence to be a treasure,
wish such a place was not light-years away!.
For a night sky's magic to be mystery as it is pleasure,
The whole world over,
Could a world if moonless be so lost for our eyers to MEASURE!.

Twinkle twinkle little star when we're alone and look we might

Nice poem , good imagery, makes you feel good to read it!.
A gem in the making!Www@QuestionHome@Com

You have great potential!. I'm impressed, and that's not easy to do!. My son was published in "2003 Best Poet Society" and you sound like you have the same ethic!. Of course I am such an idiot I didn't pay attention to who was asking the Q but it sounds like you have a very deep concept of mother earth and what's in the stars!. It takes a certain type of person to understand the depth of what you've written here!. Your good!. AND MIKE write your own!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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