POEM! really NEED feedbacks?

Question: POEM! really NEED feedbacks!?

As the froth of nectar
that waters the pond of dreams;
you sputter
In your embrace
I bloom
as Lilly blossoms!.

As snow's soft flakes,
you melt on my petal cheeks
touching me
not quite!.

Memories' butterfly kisses
turn into love letters
before my interlaced eyelashes --

--written amongst
changing cloud patterns
in our long forgotten
secret scripts

And I wishfully think

Is the rhythm in honey dew drips
upon window sill;
the tunes of my love for you!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

the imagry in this poem is amazing!!!!! wonderfully written a wonderful work of art!. nicely written!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it, but 1 thing!. "as Lilly blossoms" should be taken out!. it interupts the flow of the words!. other than that, its really good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautiful, sweet, sensual!. Maybe more intensity is needed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com