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im only 13 hope that makes a difference

Intentions


i know what its like
to get a girl like you
and how sad it is
when you say adieu

oh how i felt
and i wont forget
how you loved me
and how you quit

you flirt a lot
and flirt some more
and i will tell you
you will not score

ive learned my lesson
once before
i hope i wont have to
relive that sore

i know you have no intention
on to hurting me
but in the real world
its how it has to be

how beautiful you are
and how stunning you can be
its just no wonder
how you get to me

but every night i lay my head
with the info
that you said
that you will love me until your dead

that helps alot
i love you too
but still dont think
that i forgive youWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I really like this poem from the Title to the very end!. I like how you have questioned the intentions of your love interest!. You seem to know that despite the fact that she does not intend to hurt you, she still does!. Taking comfort in her words of love, yet being fearful of being hurt again seems to be the main theme in this nicely written piece!. Loving and forgiving are supposed to go together, yet you have effectively shown how sometimes they simply do not!.
Very good for one so young!. :) You seem to be wise beyond your years when it comes to "intentions"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats good!.!.!.
is it about someone cheating or something!?!?
sounds like it!. i kinda cheated on my ex boyfriend (this was like five months ago) and he found out and he never really truly forgave me even tho he still loved me!.

thats the only thing i can associate this poem with!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it, although i think words like "adieu" are a little pretentious now matter who you areWww@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds good! Keep up the good work!. Poetry is a way to chase away the demons!.Www@QuestionHome@Com