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Question: My poem----thanks for the feedback!?
this is my first poem!.!.!.!.!.i have some others on here but i wrote this first-----im also only 13 if that makes a difference


Trust


I know you don’t trust me
and you have every right
but if you don’t listen 1 last time
i will have to write

i love you with all my heart
and if that isn’t true
i will go and set things straight
and there’s nothing you can do

you and all your friends
just don’t know when to stop
i try and try again
hoping to get to the top

a list of your best friends
and a list at that
i wish i could be up there
so we could cut the crap

i don’t know what to do
to gain your trust back
so i will just sit here
and wait for you to crack

i really do love you
and all that your about
so please just trust again
or find another route

i ask myself a lot
why i don’t forget you
its really really tough
when my heart is stuck like glueWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow!.!.!.you know the way you expressed yourself seemed really heartfelt!. keep it up!

ps-oh and it doesnt take big and fancy words to write a good poem!. you showed that :]Www@QuestionHome@Com