My poem...=]?

Question: My poem!.!.!.=]!?

To live, is to sleep, is to breath, is to try,
To forget all the things you said,
All those horrible lies!.
And the words that you said that destroyed my poor head!.
And the looks that you gave that broke my poor heart!.

Did you tell her to be such an attention seeking whore!?
Is that your secret ambition when life becomes a bore!?
It used to be you and me,
Me and you
And now I see…
I’m too good for you!?

I’m not sure what happened…
I was stupid,
Na?ve
And you told me you cared…
I was certainly deceived!.
So you crawled back to her,
Acting innocent as could be,
And made it seem like the only thing wrong,
Was me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

wow, that is truly outstanding!. I can totally relate to it!. You've summed up your feelings in a such a beautiful poem!.
It sounds like its something thats happened to you, i can feel the emotions while reading it

wow, you shoudl really write more poems!. =]]]]

xxxWww@QuestionHome@Com

the measure's kinda bad
i think if you measure it out it'll be a lot better
needs to have a smoother flow
otherwise, decent

constructive criticism never hurt anybody
try to fix it and post the new version
im sure it'll be betterWww@QuestionHome@Com

I’m too good for you!?
is not what you should say
but the opposite

besides that the poem is formidable and it starts of with the common technique the first few lines but then you break that common factor by the second stanzaWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's good :)

To the person who said it doesn't rhyme:
Poems don't have to rhyme!

Even though it's a good poem, I think it will sound better if someone sang it as a song!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

PERFECT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

bravo!

please answer my q! http://answers!.yahoo!.com/question/index;!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is a great poem!

sounds like something horrible happened to you though! sorry!.

&& people a poem doesnt have to rhyme!. gosh!Www@QuestionHome@Com

FANTASTIC!!! I love it! I love poetry, that was beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

its really good, but i wouldnt put it on a public website, because someone can just copy it and get the credit/money for itWww@QuestionHome@Com

~I really like it~
You wrote down all you thoughts and emotions in a good form, and nice choice of vocabulary!! keep writing =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

WOW made me cry beautiful *claps* BEAUTIFULWww@QuestionHome@Com

Umm good but not enough, your details are all one one thing!. Poems are suppose to be really really wildy lines, your is just straight!. Id give it a 56/100Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's kinda whiny!.!.!.!.but I thinkWww@QuestionHome@Com

i love it
amazing

you should write musicWww@QuestionHome@Com

Its a beautiful poem, full of emotion!. Good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

that was awsome dont listen to anyone who thinks it stinksWww@QuestionHome@Com

i love it!. It sound so real, like it's happening to the reader!. great job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very very good!. really really gr8!. ur a very amazing writer!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it a lot!. Did you just write it or did you do it for something!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Nice Job! Poetry is for feelings!.

!.!.!.!.!.!.LOVE
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!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.OVER
RECOVERWww@QuestionHome@Com

SWEET!!!!!

You kind of write like me!.!.!.AntiWww@QuestionHome@Com

poems dont always need to rhymeeeWww@QuestionHome@Com

that doesnt rhyme!Www@QuestionHome@Com

whoa i love it!. its beautiful!.!. really great!. write more :DWww@QuestionHome@Com

I quite like it, but try to make things rhyme!.Www@QuestionHome@Com