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Question: Would a Vampire break a pact for a loved one!?
HelsingFurry
“He comes in light of Day”
the KnowingStranger warned with vigor
“It has always been his Damndable way,
and he will hunt the WhiteChild forever”
“Think you not that I can’t see
for it was I who sought his pact”
Harker’s words rang with a sway
one which MortalVoices lacked
The Stranger shifted
clearly shaken
but wished to see the girl again
So Harker went for to awaken
and their flight would soon begin
In a SeekerSight Vlad could see
the man of HunterBlood draw near
no time was left for them to flee
He would fight for his DaughterDear
and this foe would repent his plot
The story is changing shape and so are the poems… I don’t THINK I like this one as much as the others… something about it doesn’t quite work but since I do not know exactly what it is, I bring it to you!.
Do you think it works… not only works but is good enough for the rest of them…!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This works, my love, and I am wondering what deal that Vlad Harker cut with Van Helsing, odd how the names are both VH, not that that was intentional or anything!. But still, the white child, the daughter of a damned man and a somewhat pure woman!. This plot just gets thicker and thicker, but the writing keeps on getting more and more intense!. I am thoroughly hooked, my love!. Send me an e-mail sometime!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is intensely exciting!.!.!."In a SeekerSight Vlad could see the man of HunterBlood draw near" and no time for flight!.!.!. The fight will be fascinating, as i have no idea where this is going!. I am completely absorbed by this unfolding story, however!. It has metamorphosized a bit, but this poem is still uncanny and enchanting, like the rest of the series!. I am with you until the end!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The only difference I can see hon is that your lines are a bit longer but, you haven't lost anything from writing this way!.!.!.
The rhythm and flow are just as flawless as they've been!. It's amazin' to me that you are actually writing out such a long tale in "RHYME!!!" and doing a fantastic job at that, I for one am truly impressed *^_^*
I think your muse is on the loose!
(it's a "good thing")Www@QuestionHome@Com
I haven't kept up on this line of poems as much as the other series you have done!.!.!. I like it though it is very dark!. It began more dark than it has been in the last few but looks like it is going to get worse!.!.!. we are there with you even in this darkness Siren! Thank you for baring the darker part of your soul without fear of rejection!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wo-Oh!.!.!. Woh!.!.!. A guy leaves for two days and she's already gone a mile in the story! I love it so far!. This is not like the others I read in your history files! This one is better and not better in some ways!. It is more cinematic!. I would love to see the movie!Www@QuestionHome@Com
So sorry I missed the last two!.!.!. been dealing with slow Internet!. This is not like the rest!.!.!. that is all I can say!. The others have a newness and this one is going deeper into a story that we all, as of now, already know (because of the first ones)!. I am pleased to see the tale progressing but am becoming confused on what number I am reading seeing as you do not number these!.!.!. it is like watching a series on TV and missing some, you still get the gist from where you left off but are bummed that you didn't get to actually see the episodes!. Some are going to get in on this in the middle, have to go to the store and buy the first few seasons on DVD!.!.!. Keep up this story, I am anxious for the ending!.!.!. but not too soon!.Www@QuestionHome@Com