Is this a warm poem?

Question: Is this a warm poem!?

this is my first time writing this type of poem!.!.!. :)
okay here it goes:

lying in the tall grass,
looking in the tall glass,
watching everything pass!.!.

and i saw flying paper birds,
they're wings were filled with many words!.!.

and we were sitting with the sun
i never thought this would be so fun,
and there i peeped from the clouded shelves
watching versions of ourselves!.!.

and we were holding cherry pops
our glasses full of lemon drops,

while you wait,
behind those candy bars,
gazing at those shiny stars,
only to dream again!.

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this poem was made out of random words and has no story behind itWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

very nice!. the poem takes on a meaning of itself!. the imagery is magnificent although i think the ",,,***" ending in the first three lines was poor!. i like the line "watching versions of ourselves" and "while you wait / behind those candy bars"!. the lines give the reader something tangible to hold on to whilst giving the reader something to ponder about and consider with regards to its relation to the rest of the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I agree with the person above me who said you have a strong imagination!. Because you do! (That's a compliment by the way), when I was in the 4th grade I had a really nice teacher who said that I would (someday) be able to publish poems which happened by the end the the year by doing this!.!.!.

put emotion, thought, energy and creativity into wright even if it means making it up sometimes!.

hmm as I'm reading it again the only thing I can think of is that in the second line with "tall", I would change it to another word instead of tall b/c you have tall in the first line, and it kinda ties your tongue since glass and grass are so close as well!.

other then that man, its totally cool creativity is so much fun to work with and I can see that you got a talent for it!. Keep it up and peace out!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm not sure what a 'warm' poem is - but like the idea of an endless stream - of random rhyming words - with no particular theme!.
Seems a good reflection of chaotic thoughts - wherein we seek the connections of the essence of culture - the language!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

eh!.!.!.kinda!.!.!.i kinda felt itt!.its is very creative and i loved the imagery w/in it!.but add a lil more!.ifeel like its too short to feel real emotion!.i think this poem needs emotion and feelings that would make it more warm but im no poetry specialist thts jus my opinion=DWww@QuestionHome@Com

It's a darn good poem -- to think of randomness and have it fly out with such charm!.

Excellent -- at first I didn't like the tall used in the first two sentences, but it works!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

well im not exactly sure what a warm poem is (sorry) but this is really really good! i like how it seems so random, but when u read it u can just picture it!.!.i like it a lot :) great job!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Forget your so-called poem which is no good to others!. Help more spreading your hand instead of sound talking!. Your poems are already write on your face!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked it as it was sweet and calming!.For your first time writing this type of poem' you did a great job!.!.Pen on my friend!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You had very strong imagery!.

I like it just coming from!.!.!. nothing!.!.

Like!.!.!. I tsounds like remembering your school years and stuff!.!.!. I like it kid good work!

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i think it's really sweet! i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com

very good!! ten pointsWww@QuestionHome@Com

i think its coolWww@QuestionHome@Com