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Question: The price of Anger; care to comment!?
Acrostic Sestina
A sestina (or sestine or sextain) is a highly structured poem consisting of six six-line stanzas followed by a tercet (called its envoy or tornada), for a total of thirty-nine lines!. The same set of six words ends the lines of each of the six-line stanzas, but in a different order each time;
Allowed to wonder all my life
Releasing waves of anger
I wanted so desperately to find myself
So my dreams i locked away
Emptiness was all I new
Nothing seemed to matter, until I met you
Making me feel, that all there was, was me and you
I am so glad to have you in my life
Got to get up, start my life a-new
Holding off the anger
Taking time away
You know, I have got to find myself
Eagles are just like myself
And I know if I fly I’ll meet you
Got to get away
Enter into a new life
Leaving behind the anger
So we can have back the life we knew
For our dreams are brand new
Only for you and myself
Love will replace the anger
Love is all about you
Opening up my life
Without you I’d be locked away
But you borrowed the key to get me away
Realizing this wasn’t new
Opened my eyes to my life
Kidding myself
Endangering you
Not seeing I was killing us with my anger
Damm! that anger
Ruined me and sent every good thing away
Everything except you
And now I’ve been made new
Made me see myself
Selfish, that was my life
You are my life don’t go away
Overcame anger you made me new
Undervalued myself until I met youWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is an amazing coup!. The Sestina in itself is an extremely difficult form!. To also make it acrostic requires an enormous amount of work!. One suggestion: since this is a very old form, it should have some punctuation, at least at the end!. This is in no way to be intended as a criticism of your wonderful work with Sestinas and other forms of poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds like through anger, a Eagle realized his mistake formed from anger & wants to correct it!.
Upon realizing his mistake, anger dissipated & turned him into an Eagle in search of love & forgiveness!.
Then, The Eagle swooped into the nest of the one Eagle that still has love & forgiveness!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I am quite simply astonished! You have mastered this form beautifully and made it acrostic as well!. With careful craft you have created a masterpiece!. It is an introspective and revealing poem that seems to come from the heart!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Sounds like typical teenage poetry about being in love and having a relationship go sour because one person in the relationship didn't idealize the other person in the same way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Very, very good!.
heres my very short one
the price of anger
like an anchor dropped in ocean
struck through door
peeled my heart and still theres more
like an anchor dropped in oceanWww@QuestionHome@Com
Yeah it does seem like anger never does any of of any good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I loved this!. When I die I am coming back as an Eagle!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
My heads hurts already!.
Sounded real enough to me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
live in the real worldWww@QuestionHome@Com
If you are writing such a skilled piece for poet masters, or an editor in hopes of publishing, I'm sure they would be highly impressed with this obvious effort!.
I'm not into that high an echelon of writers at all so I don't feel I can adequately comment on such a piece and do it justice since I can't properly appreciate it from an educated view point!.
I cannot begin to imagine how much time and work went into this, not to mention the skill!. You should consider publishing, and definitely belonging to poet groups where you can get adequate feedback on such material!.Www@QuestionHome@Com