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Memorial Day

Our bones lie here, in cold hard ground,
Alone but in a crowd!.
Some of us in clothes interred,
And some in but a shroud!.

We fought in wars and there we died,
We all thought we were right!.
And now in sleep the dead do weep,
Throughout this endless night!.

Each year we see the ones who bring,
The flowers to us here!.
And though we have no hearts to feel,
It fills our bones with cheer!.

Remembered souls can come to life,
As fleeting memories!.
Yes, even those who sank in ships,
Out on embattled seas!.

This day each year is set aside,
So you remember us!.
We like to see you bringing gifts,
And making such a fuss!.

Then back to sleep this lonely sleep,
This sleep that never ends!.
Except that special day each year,
When honored by our friends!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This one is special!. I do not think they sleep lonely!. They live in our hearts and I would like to believe that we rejoin them at some point!. I admit that I'm not a firm believer in an afterlife, but I can hope that my doubts will some day be erased!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

If you wrote the above, it is the best example of poetry I have seen on this exchange!. Your meter is perfect, tone wonderful!. I hope you have gotten a copyright before you placed it on the computer for the world to see!. Congratulations!. I think it's as good as In Flander's Fields!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It speaks from your heart honoring those that have passed!. Why wouldn't it be suitable!? People will read and everyone has the right to accept or reject!. That is what our brave men throughtout the ages have fought for!. The right for us all to choose!Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is a beautiful poem, full of a somber sort of joy!. I always remember my soldiers every day in my heart!. Thank you for the gift of this poem, and also for the gift of our freedom!. Blessed Be!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Beautifully written, can I have a copy of the book of poems that you should have published!.A fitting poem for all our fallen heroes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well said and very appropriate!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like the view point you chose - the deceased Vets!. Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You should see about publishing that!. Extremely good!. Thanks for sharingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Very well said!Www@QuestionHome@Com