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Question: I need to feel your Love; Care to comment!?
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If I could feel your love today
My life would be so much better
I wanted to learn to wait
But I can’t hold on much longer
On my knees I will pray for you
But I need to feel your love

I need to feel your love
To feel it, today
Its because of you
My world has turned for the better
But how much longer
Must I wait!?

Do I have to wait
To feel your love!?
“Just a little while longer”
You said, “It will be today”
I’m trusting it’ll be better
From what I read in that letter, from you

That’s why I’ve dedicated my life, to you
But my love can’t wait
Because I trusted once and now know better
I need that love
Today
Not a minute longer

Because, I just cant hold on any longer
I need to be with you
For all my today’s
Don’t tell me, to wait
With all this love
You too, need to feel better

Both of us need to feel better
We need to be together longer
To experience the full measure of this love
So, it up to you
But my love won’t wait
I need to feel your love, Today

Don’t make today any longer
Better that I don’t love you
Than I have to wait, for your loveWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The energy of this poem is so prevalent that I found myself getting more anxious with each line!. This is superior writing!Www@QuestionHome@Com

darling, i care enough to say that you were being redundant with the rhymes!.!.!.but the urgency, it's there and it's so thick i could cut it with!.!.!.almost anything sharp!.!.!.the poem needs to be shortened though!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This can be a lyric to an everlasting ballad song!. Seriously!.!.!.no kidding!. This sounds like a great love song!Www@QuestionHome@Com

I feel your anxiousness!.
I understand your yearning!.
The pleading!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
Necessity for haste!.
I love you!
It's here !.!.!.
Take it!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
Why don't you want it!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
Now!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's an excellent poem!.!.!. thanks for sharing!.

I can feel the love you've put into it!.
Good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow wonder where you get all of the inspiration to write all of these poems!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Another one for the book! Keep these going!. Some advice: better to love and wait than not to love at all!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ok but too longWww@QuestionHome@Com

i love itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I`ll give you a hug and a star!.Www@QuestionHome@Com