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Question: Plz read!.!.!.!.and post ur comments!.!.!.!.!.and help me pick a title!.!.!.!?
Rainbows created my imagination
As it arched across the sky
On one end there sat you
At the other end, there sat I
Imagining I could slide across
Over the rainbow to the end
There would be my pot of gold
The sweet love of my dear friend
The rainbow is a connection
Like a bridge from me to you
It appears joined by sunlight
Then the grey skies turn to blue
Arriving after the rainstorms
It became so evident to me
Thoughts of love follow rainbows
They arched right across the sea
A colourful arching rainbow
It has no gate, it has no door
It reaches from friend to friend
It arches from shore to shore
I smiled up today at the sky
How far would my loving smile go
It slid right over to the other side
The other end of the coloured rainbow
WELL HOW WAS IT!.!.!.!.!.!.PLZ POST UR COMMENTS AND HELP ME WITH THE TITLE!.!.!.!.!.!.THNXWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Makes a nice change from the reams of depressing emo-garbage posted in here daily!. As for comments, I felt it lost flow in some parts!. This could just be me, but I'd remove the "the" from "then the"!.
I'd change the first line to something that excludes rainbows, so you get the extra hit of introducing them later on, explaining the title and forcing people to re-read the first verse with a new perspective!. eg "provoked imaginations, as it arched across the sky, at one end sat you, the other end sat I!."
I'd change the last verse, add some plays on words about colours throughout the poem rather than just "colourful"!. also, "it became so evident to me" sounds rather clinical and doesn't convey much emotion!.
On the whole pretty good, and I can't think of a better title than the one you suggested!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
nice, good work! some interesting analogies of a ranbow compared to a smile and a bridge!.
As for a title!.!.!.hmmm maybe something like:
Bridge of colour
The other side of the Rainbow
My pot of gold
Smile of the Rainbow
something like them!.!.!.BTW have you considered making an anthology!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
i really do like this!. reading it made me smile!. it explains my image of a rainbow perfectly!. how about "the connetions of colour" for a title, or simply "a rainbow"Www@QuestionHome@Com
Nice poem!. I'd like to remember my love whenever I see a rainbow!.
"Rainbow" sounds encompassing of love and friendship themes!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
rainbow love,or the beautiful rainbow!?
it should be rainbow relatedWww@QuestionHome@Com
Polychromatic ConnectionWww@QuestionHome@Com
It's really good!.
n some title r here!.!.!.!.!.
The Colour Of Music
A Lovely Rainbow,
7 Wonders in the sky,Www@QuestionHome@Com
" motley b " Would be a bit suitable i thinkWww@QuestionHome@Com
good one!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. how abt myriads of friendship!.!.!.!.!.!.!. or at the end of the rainbow!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com