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Question: Fianl poem of the night!. a rewrite not very Dark Prince like!. Could it be improved!.!?
"sprung"
Winter's passed us by,
disappeared, I blinked my eye!.
All the doom and gloom,
it's all over none too soon!.
Spring has sprung, all around,
birds and bees a lovely sound!.
My mood has changed, all is right,
no more icy, snowy nights!.
The chill of Winter's gone,
hung around for way too long!.
Thought he'd got the best of me,
I'm still standing, feeling free!.
Spring comes only once a year,
but it wipes out all my fear!.
Crocus, roses all sublime,
I feel love, now is the time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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This is well done, light airey and filled with hope!. I like the subject and the way you have approached it!. As for the Dr!., I would like to add that "fluff" is ground up paper used in disposable diapers and is obviously what is packed inside his head to keep it from imploding!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
A rare jewel of all gems written by an uncommon poet for all seasons - Happiness, high above the cold winter snow and the dark bottomless pit!. An ornament of beauty, depicting my name!. This type poetry leaves readers of spring with happy thoughts throughout the day!. Thanks for writing for all of us! That is a rare gift!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Loved it!. If you really want to improve it you could add allusions, alliteration, metaphors, ect!. otherwise it's fine the way it is!. God bless!Www@QuestionHome@Com
lmao!!!! Ahah Steve did you hit your head!?!?!! This is killer!! LOL its way to fluffy for you Steve! Good job, but its just not your thing! Please go backk to being my DARKK prince!. :) xoxo good job
~bruciata angel~Www@QuestionHome@Com
a song of seasons and well put!. I do like the different perspectives people have on the seasons!. :)
thanks for sharingWww@QuestionHome@Com
I think it is perferct the way it is!. really disciptive and shows that u have alot of expressionWww@QuestionHome@Com
its cute, but its all fluff!.
u should get deeper
instead of stayin in the obvious
:)Www@QuestionHome@Com