Like my poem please read?

Question: Like my poem please read!?

PRIDE

im not waiting for you to come to me my boots are made for walking
im going to speak up loud you'll notice when im talking
what kinder person you think i am honey im the sea
i notice lakes ponds and rivers are jealous of me
but dont be modest dont be sad child im build on pride
thats why in between my legs theres a joy ride
im not afraid to tell the people freedom will ring
im hotter than fish oil slicker than grease and hapienese i will bringWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

;) i had a good chuckle; it brought a smile to my face!. i now what it's about!. You need to fix the grammar and break up the sentence structure!.!.!.!.!. something like this:

I'm not walking for you to come to me
My boots are made for walking!.
I'm NOT!?!?!? going to speak up loud
You'll notice when I'm talking!.
What KIND OF !?!?!? (not kinder!?) person you think I am!?
Honey, I'm the sea!.
I notice lakes, ponds and rivers are jealous of me!.
But don't be modest, don't be sad;
Child, I'm built on pride,
That's why in between my leg there's a joy ride!.
I'm not afraid to tell the people THAT freedom will ring!.
I'm hotter than fish oil, slicker than grease and
Happiness I will bring!.

Just a go!.!.!.!.!.!.!. the words in caps are additional!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!.
Great start though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's a little vauge and lame to me!. !. !. try to spice things up a little, make it more intriguing!. !.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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