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Question: IS this a brighter version of a Vampire tale!?
Daughter of Vlad Harker
A woman of FairFaith
Through WhiteEyes she revealed
A father whom she loved
An UnearthedOath concealed
She drew upon her muse
And painted night and day
She sang to FathersFiddle
And darkness did waylay
One SunSang morn a stranger came
And rapped upon the gate
With no name, he bade them hark
Before it was too late
The Father new his aim
And entreated his daughter leave
I feel like the series is coming out of the darkness and into a newer black… this is the lightest one yet and it will only get darker from here!. It may not stand on its own as much but I am still proud of this, my youngest child!.
IS it too light or is it all right!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
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This is good enough to persuade me to read the others!.!.!.!.later, when my mood is brighter!. As is often the case, there is so much contrast between the bright lucidity of style and the diaphanous, possibly murky content!. That's no criticism, it's an essential element of your charm!.
Just one thing - As always, I read poetry aloud!. I gave it my sincerest best effort!. However, three times out of four "One SunSang" came out sounding Chinese!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I think this is a beautiful poem- lighter yes, but still as ethereal and magical!. This one is deifinitely leading on from here, and into the "newer black" you mentioned, which has me anxiously wondering what will happen!. It ends on kind of a sinister note and that is part of the mystery!. It is so much more than alright!.!.!.it is wonderful!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
No, this is perfectly all right!. All stories, and poem series as well must have their mountains and valleys!. You have done very well, and I wonder indeed what Vlad Harker will do with this young man who has come a-rapping on his daughter's door!. Pray, tell on!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It seems a bit lighter yes but it does maintain some of it's darkness to it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Yeah I think its a brighter version!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
fell asleep sorryWww@QuestionHome@Com
hmm its ok!.!.!.needs to have the darkness haha=]Www@QuestionHome@Com
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