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Question: Line to this poem!?!!?!!?!!?
this is the poem:
We started in fifth grade,
standing short and young,
we didn't know much,
for our world had just begun!.
We passed through the halls
with smiles on our faces!.
Our middle school education
would take us to great places!.
Months had passed,
and the we had grown older,
we moved through the school!.
getting bigger and bolder!.
As we saunter down these aisles,
and onto the stage,
we think how we've grown
and increased in age!.
Now we sit in the lights,
getting called down name by name!.
We think of this moment
as our moment of fame!.
The ritual song plays
as we progress out the doors!.
i need two lines!.
the last word has to rhyme with doors!.
it's for the back of my middle school graduation program!. =)
thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
The ritual song plays
as we progress through the doors
The tassels swing on our caps
Our capes brush the floors
With light in our eyes
and hope in our heart
We're look to the future
When from this school we do part!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
And now you will see us striding the floors
And this is last time, we will be back here never more, we will never again stride on these ageless floors, never more never more
Good luck on your program!!!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
thank you, our teachers and parents
for the knowledge within us shall soar!.!.!.
hmm!.!.kind of cheesy but it was my best :]Www@QuestionHome@Com
I could finish it, but why take it so far to make it mine!?
PeaceWww@QuestionHome@Com
Your poem's rhyming scheme is as follows:
A
B
C
B
D
E
F
E
In other words, the 3rd and 4th line of every stanza rhyme!. Obviously you know that!. :)
I know you're trying to make the last stanza fit the same scheme, but I think it that the poem would sound unfinished that way - like you're leaving your readers hanging!.
I'd suggest using a rhyming couplet at the end!. That's where the last two lines (the 'couplet') rhyme!. It makes for a more complete-sounding poem!. Read it out loud and you'll see what I mean!.
Here is my suggestion, although I've changed it somewhat, maybe you'll like it!.!.!. here-goes:
"Pomp and circumstance plays
And we make our way through the maze
These memories will forever remain,
As we embark a new terrain!."Www@QuestionHome@Com