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Position:Home>Poetry> What do you think, is this poem good enough to be published???Question: What do you think, is this poem good enough to be published!?!?!? Ok I've been working on this poem really hard and thinking about entering it in this local poetry contest (winner has the poem published)!.
She is so sad!. She hides behind that fake smile, But inside she is crying!. Why!? Why!? Why is the world so sad!? With every fibre of her being she tries to be happy!. But tears come pouring out!. And her fake smile cracks And everybody can see her sadness!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: It needs to be less straight forward, it needs a bigger pallet of words and the individual sentences need condensing!. But, don't fret! You've got potential, you just need patience!. If this poem came out in an hour, fix it for a day!. The more time you spend, the better it will become!. There will be a point where you WILL know it's finished!. Don't be so simple with your wording! Make your readers think! Weave and mix the colors! Make it into a real work of art! Never, ever be afraid to write something your readers might not understand!Www@QuestionHome@Com It's not bad!. It's better than the other one you posted by far, but you could do a lot more with it!. I've seen this same type of idea exectuted a lot better!. Some things to conside would be creating more of the character!. You basically give it to us outright when you could explain parts of it more!. I mean, I don't really know why she's unhappy after all!. You dodge that part of it and I want to know more about her, not just the one small description we get!. With some work it could be good enough to publish, but right now it's not there!. You can seriously extend this and do a lot more with the character!.Www@QuestionHome@Com sounds like a lyrics from a song i've heard before, no offense!. but i liked how you tried making poems , maybe one of these days you can make something original thats good to be published :DWww@QuestionHome@Com I think it's okay, but contest judges always go for happy rhyming poems!. =(Www@QuestionHome@Com Good enough!. PeaceWww@QuestionHome@Com yeah thats really good it made me feel sad most def send it in =)Www@QuestionHome@Com No, honestly I don't think it is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |