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Question: Is my poetry okay!?
i have always lived with a problem with obesity and low self esteem
i live with horrible cravings every night
this is some of my poetry
please only comments on the poetry, not on my weight or my self control(btw im 12 so keep that in mind)

She walks!.!.!.!.!.!.!. waddles, cold , fat,!.!.!.!.never will be loved!.She cant stop even if its poisoning her body!.she just loves the taste,the withdraw!.She would kill!.!.!.!.!.!.you heard kill!. it starts at six and ends sat sleep!.anytime in between these times she is vonerable the strike!. Until her need is restored


i know its not REALLY poetry but i like it!.!.!. so its much appriciated for the nice commentsWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
wow!.
that was really good!.
you should continue writing poetry!. =)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked it!. I think you should carry on!Www@QuestionHome@Com

She didn't start out totally addicted
She loves the taste of her food
eat all the time never stopping for rest
for the taste but feeling crude

Beg, borrow or steal or kill, conflicted
really hungry all to know
Waddling fat, unable to move much
with time the boby will grow

In four years with her dating restricted
with her beautiful eyes
Shinny silky hair, bright honey red lips
Tall, skinny body, surprise!Www@QuestionHome@Com