Can someone please critique my sonnet?

Question: Can someone please critique my sonnet!?

Editing would be greatly appreciated

As tears rolled down her face,
She could not still believe,
That a best friend could deceive,
Her trust and steal her place!.

She replayed the past in her mind,
Trying to understand what she did wrong,
How could she have not known all along!?
That her “friend” pretended to be kind!.

She wiped the tears away,
Crying no more for what was lost,
Yesterday was gone she was living for today,

She became stronger,
The heartbreak took time to heal,
But now, she was more wiser!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

It needs work!. But, like I always say, that's not a bad thing!. On the last line, try "she was all the wiser for it"!. I don't know if that fits in a sonnet, they aren't my thing!. But, I suggest this line nonetheless!. This is just an opinion, but what good is literature without opinion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Overall I find it a little dull!. The subjecty of the poem does not seem to havea deep meaning and it is one we have seen before!. The lines seem to be divided awkwardly!. Especially here:

"That a best friend could deceive,
Her trust and steal her place!."

The last two stranzas are good!. They show a welcome change of emotion needed in the poem!.

Just work on it a bit more and it could be really great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

1) you should work more on the subject matter- it should be more about 'steal her place'

2)2nd stanza is really uneven with the rhyming of 1st and 4th lines, change that

3)last two stanzas dont even rhyme!.!.

4) most important though is for you to have a subject matter and purpose and not just talk about random things which vaguely relate to the 1st stanza!.!.!.

i hope you redo it and send it againWww@QuestionHome@Com

its not in the order that a sonnet should be in!.!.!.the order should be A,B,A,B,C,D,C,D,E,F,E,F,G,G!.!.!.if that means anything to youWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it is really good!. I have been in that exact situation before and this sonnet encompasses what I felt emotionally!. Good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

it doesnt flow
at all
and by flow i dont mean rhyme or shitznit like that
but
when you read it
it should mean something

im not feeling anything
sorry
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well its not abab cdcd efef gg ur off with some lines like on the last stanza but other than that are u not doing it in iambic pentameter!? which is ten syllables every verse!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

maybe there's some part u should edit!.
her trust and steal her place!? maybe u should edit to be heard beautifully!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

greatttttttt JOB OMGSH FANTASTIQUE!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

D- Try again

"more wiser"!?!?!?!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's not a sonnetWww@QuestionHome@Com

!.!.!.!. where is the last couplet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow!.!. uv gott somee talentt:D!!
way to go!.!.
!!Www@QuestionHome@Com