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The stranger

Day by day, night after night, I can't close my eyes without seeing his face!. That face that stole my dreams, a face that I can't go to sleep without seeing his eyes looking at in the darkness!.

I still remember his smile, his eyes with a color that nobody saw before!. One day they are cold and dark and the other day they are shining yellow caramel!. I still remember his eyes when we first met, they were dark and cold, I remember the joy that was obvious in them!. I still remember the place I first met him, it was in the darkness somewhere where nobody goes!. I still remember how he got closer, how he said: "Don’t be afraid, I won't kill you" with his sweet quite voice!. "What do you want!?" I asked with panic, I thought about all the things a guy could do to a girl, he laughed quietly and said with his unbelievable voice:" What I want from you isn’t what a normal human wants"!. I remember how he got closer, I remember his cold fingers on my neck, one touch and my whole body began screaming, my human-instinct told me to run, run away, far away!. That this stranger would not cause anything but trouble, yet my legs didn’t move and I stayed where I was beneath the stranger's eyes!.
I tried to calm down and my head began spinning: Who is this person!? I didn’t know…but I was sure that he was more then just a human…!.my heart began racing…!.more than just a human!? …!. The stranger laughed like he could hear my heart beat and knew how scared I was, I looked at him and was shocked by his beauty, I stared into his eyes and whispered: "What are you!?" !."Don’t be afraid honey…I don’t want to hurt you but I need to"!. "What do you want!?" I asked!. "Your blood…"!.Could it be that he is…no that can't be…he can't be…
Then I remembered his face coming closer to my neck, his teeth cutting my skin and his mouth drinking my blood!. Blood full of innocence and trust, I felt how thirsty he was, he was drinking faster and faster, drinking the blood of a human free of guilt, the blood of a human who didn’t do anything wrong…"Vampire" I whispered the only word I could say, he laughed again…"I'm sorry sweetheart but you will turn to be just like me…" "Why!?" I asked, but he was gone and I stayed there without an answer!. He was gone, without erasing this memory from my heart, he went and left behind the knowledge that these imaginary creatures really do exist…and one day I will turn into a stranger like him…into a creature of the night…into a Vampire…

The last thing I remember was that I heard his sweet amazing laugh that I hated myself for loving it…and then I was alone…alone in the darkness!.!.!.

I woke up in the middle of the night… it was the same stupid dream again that wakes me up… was this my imagination playing a bad game with me!? Or was this real!?
I looked in the mirror and saw the blood on my neck and a little mark of a bit… no, this wasn’t just a dream this was the reality of my life…Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this is brilliant!.!.!.doesn't seeem like the writing of a beginner !.!.!.!.more like a classic story!.!.!.


great work!.!.!.i love it!.!.!.!.normaly i don't like vapire stories but this one really caught ny attention!.!.!.!.!.good idea and brilliant work

good luck!.!.!.and keep it up!.!.!.also keep posting to YAWww@QuestionHome@Com

very good but you miss the background music lolWww@QuestionHome@Com

Great beginning for a book or a short story!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Well good ! But I wish that you had written in a poetic form!. It is not as hard as you think!. Make an effort i am sure you will succeed!.
These vampires do exist, but by and large till you are in your body , they can't do anything much to you!. I do not know who has started this vampire business, quite unnecessary, and needlessly tedious and frightening weak people!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I was interested by what you wrote!.!.!. a vampire!?

You can call me Dracula!.
Or Mr!. Lover!. (!.!.!. I'm alone, too!.)

Sorry, don't mean to seem like I'm flirting on you!.
(not too much, at least)!.
Just trying to enjoy myself!. I don't think that I'm a vampire, though!.!.!. but, I'm not so sure!. !. !. !. !.

!. !. !. are you thirsty!?
For blood!? I'm not so sure that I want to just give it away!.Www@QuestionHome@Com