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Question: This is a rewrite from the dark days of 8 months ago!. Opinions and criticisms please!.!?
"dismay"
My life, lost and confused,
everyone seems so amused!.
I plot the end, my bloody demise,
thinking of you, complete despise!.
You used me and threw me away,
used once, I'd seen better days!.
These tears falling down, so real,
ugly things deep inside that I feel!.
Lost all my reasons for living,
and my ability for giving!.
You don't want me anyway,
it gets clearer every day!.
Why must you be so damned evil,
you broke me, it seems so unreal!.
I'm now such a pathetic mess!.
and you, could not care any less!.
I count the reasons I've left,
to you I have one small request!.
Just please explain to me this,
why do you speak in a hiss!.
My final hours, time is now up,
your party I won't interrupt!.
Starting to feel, there's no more pain,
my life blood swirls down the drain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
hmm, I'm thinking one of the addictions has reared it's ugly head in this one again!. You hate it, it broke you, you're a mess, and you only want to end it all!. Has to be drugs!. Great poem, thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is how i feel about my mom right now!. Shopping is not good for us!. Not at all!. Ugh!. She threatened to commit suicide again today!. I'm getting tired of it!. I want to just run out in front of an 18 wheeler and get away from it all!. Peace would be a nice thing!. A very nice thing!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
if only you would take my hand
then everything will be as planned
but you and your desires are to strong for me
thats whats going to end are destiney!.!.!.
im going to go to sleep know good night my little happy happy princeWww@QuestionHome@Com
Please don't be offended, but your poetry is so painful!. Your aching hearts, in all of you, disturbs me!. How can I make you understand if you are broken in these places, don't keep going there anymore!. When pain beckons your attention say, "No thanks!." Think on good things to build you up, not tear you down!. Things that encourage and build you up and fill you with peace and happiness!. Even if you have to go outside and look at the beautiful sun, the moon, the stars, the trees, the sky!. Rise up above the people around you!. No one is worthy or can destroy you unless you allow it!. It takes more strength to get up and walk then to lie in the mire!. I have had to do it many times before, but I would never have gotten up had I kept wallowing in the hurt, or the dirt!. All of you have a good creative mind, too good to waste on depressive thoughts!.You asked for opinions, this is mine, even though it is probably different than to what you are accustomed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com