I know poems are supposed to be what you think, but, do you think this is good?

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Storm
She gallops wildly around her empty paddock, mane and tail flowing freely behind her!. A once wild horse, trapped in a cage!. Alone, but determined!. Her brown eyes stared me down, demanding to be let free!. Wishing to be heard!. Hoping for someone to listen!. The beautiful filly’s pure white coat glistened in the blinding sun, like an angel’s wings in heaven!. Or the shock of lightning on a stormy night!.

I actually based the poem on my story I'm writing, and I was just seeing what other people think of it, and if it even sounds like a poem!.
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

i think its a good poem; very detailed and shows a lot of emotion towards the horse!. nice choice of words and i would love to hear your story! sounds interesting!Www@QuestionHome@Com

it does not sound like a poem!. And the emotion doesn't fit right, like it is unrealistic!. Your description doesn't connect with the readerWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!.!.!.I think it would be a lot better with some metaphorsWww@QuestionHome@Com