Is this good? I tried hard on this.?

Question: Is this good!? I tried hard on this!.!?

Time will not stop but move faster
so thoughts repeat from past
never turning back
thought rise up
wonder comes but strikes fast
there never leaving
always staying
I can't help it
they remain in site like
a dark hallway with a light at the end
the faster you run the farther it gets
never fading
always staying

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Well done *claps* impressed by ur work!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It was really good, I liked the simplicity!.
Only one suggestion, either have it end with "Never fading" or "Always staying"!. It would be good if redundancy was a pattern in the poem, but since it isn't, you may want to get rid of one!. But it is your poem, not mine, and if you feel like that's how you want it to end, then keep it!
Nice job, I really do think it's great!

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Similies and metaphors are always good for poetry!. Rhyming doesn't have to occur but a steady rhythm should flow through it!. It is a very good poem, with a rhythm that is easy to follow!. There is a similie in the 9th and 10th lines, which is always good in poetry!. To improve, you should include metaphors and improve a kind of flow or rhythm through the poem!. I think you should be proud!. That is a very good poem!. Good work!Www@QuestionHome@Com

hmm im no poet expert or anything,just a modern guy so!.!.!.

I think its ok!.!.!.i like the first half more than the second half and the last 2 things you said,(!.never fading always staying),that sounds nice!.

i give it a!.!.!.6-7 out of 10

REMEMBER,im just a normal dude so i dont know much bout this stuff!. Good luck with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I hate to be the grammar police, but since nobody else mentioned it!. Site should be spelled Sight!.

I like the last 4 lines the most!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it; there's good imagery!. Reminds me of my pre-antidepressent days!.!.!.
Just add an 's' to "thought"!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good! Write some more!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds great! Keep on writing, don't stop there!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

neither is good or bad
somthing is facts or not
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That is awsome!!!!!. im not just saying it but it really is!!!! goood workWww@QuestionHome@Com

I love it it's great!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

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i think it's pretty goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

it's good due, you've done well!. props =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

not bad!.!.!.!.so how can i squeeze contradiction in there!.!.!.!.!.!.!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

I liked it!.

Keep on writing,Www@QuestionHome@Com

nice work!.!.!.good one!.!.!.!.welll, i like long lines!.!.!.!.rather than the short one!.!.!.!.u've done welll frm ur side!.!.!.keep it up!!Www@QuestionHome@Com